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From tolle...@dltolleson.com
Subject Re: Error on your web site
Date Wed, 29 Mar 2017 22:39:00 GMT
Marcus,

I'll try to to explain myself better.  It is a recommendation to further
change the same sentence.

This first part is fine...
"Write new or improve existing documentation"

But this second part doesn't make sense in English...
"...also with technical topics"

Here are two options to fix it (pick whichever one is correct):

Option 1:
"*Using technical topics, write new or improve existing documentation*"

(This means a person will look at technical things in order to write what
is needed)

*OR*

Option 2:
"*Write new or improve existing documentation and about technical topics*"

(In English usage, a person can write technical topics, but it more
acceptable to say that a person writes ABOUT technical topics. So, option 2
above means a person will write or improve documentation and will also
write ABOUT things that are technical.)

I hope that is easier to understand. If you have any questions, feel free
to ask. I am a writer.

Tolleson

On Wed, Mar 29, 2017 at 4:45 PM, Marcus <marcus.mail@wtnet.de> wrote:

> Am 29.03.2017 um 20:58 schrieb tolleson@dltolleson.com:
>
>> Thanks for letting me know.
>>
>> I would point out, [...]
>>
>
> I'm confused. Is this just a further comment on the sentence in question?
> Or do you want to suggest a further change? If the later one, then I've not
> understood what you want to express.
>
> Maybe t's because I'm not a native speaker. ;-)
>
> Thanks
>
> Marcus
>
>
>
> On Wed, Mar 29, 2017 at 12:55 PM,
>> ​> wrote:
>>
>>     Am 29.03.2017 um 16:24 schrieb tolleson@dltolleson.com
>>     <mailto:tolleson@dltolleson.com>:
>>
>>         Just wanted to bring your attention an error on the OpenOffice
>>         web site.
>>
>>         The error is on this page...
>>
>> ​​
>> ​​
>> https://openoffice.apache.org/get-involved.html
>>         <https://openoffice.apache.org/get-involved.html>
>>
>>         The error is under the heading, "A multidisciplinary open source
>>         project"
>>         and is the second item in the list of people that your
>>         organization is
>>         looking for.
>>
>>         The text at issue now reads...
>>         • Write or existing documentation, also with technical topics
>>
>>         I would suggest using one of the following...
>>
>>         • Write on existing documentation and technical topics
>>         Or
>>         • Rewrite existing documentation and technical topics
>>
>>         Or my personal favorite...
>>         • Improve existing documentation and technical topics
>>
>>         You guys have a great product and I hope this helps in a small
>> way,
>>
>>
>>     thanks for your hint. To keep the change minimal I've changed it in
>>     the following way:
>>
>>     "Write new or improve existing documentation, also with technical
>>     topics"
>>
>>     Marcus
>>
>
>


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