Return-Path: Delivered-To: apmail-directory-dev-archive@www.apache.org Received: (qmail 90767 invoked from network); 24 May 2010 18:16:51 -0000 Received: from unknown (HELO mail.apache.org) (140.211.11.3) by 140.211.11.9 with SMTP; 24 May 2010 18:16:51 -0000 Received: (qmail 88797 invoked by uid 500); 24 May 2010 18:16:51 -0000 Delivered-To: apmail-directory-dev-archive@directory.apache.org Received: (qmail 88721 invoked by uid 500); 24 May 2010 18:16:50 -0000 Mailing-List: contact dev-help@directory.apache.org; run by ezmlm Precedence: bulk List-Help: List-Unsubscribe: List-Post: List-Id: Reply-To: "Apache Directory Developers List" Delivered-To: mailing list dev@directory.apache.org Received: (qmail 88713 invoked by uid 99); 24 May 2010 18:16:50 -0000 Received: from athena.apache.org (HELO athena.apache.org) (140.211.11.136) by apache.org (qpsmtpd/0.29) with ESMTP; Mon, 24 May 2010 18:16:50 +0000 X-ASF-Spam-Status: No, hits=-1446.6 required=10.0 tests=ALL_TRUSTED,AWL X-Spam-Check-By: apache.org Received: from [140.211.11.22] (HELO thor.apache.org) (140.211.11.22) by apache.org (qpsmtpd/0.29) with ESMTP; Mon, 24 May 2010 18:16:49 +0000 Received: from thor (localhost [127.0.0.1]) by thor.apache.org (8.13.8+Sun/8.13.8) with ESMTP id o4OIGTv3010951 for ; Mon, 24 May 2010 18:16:29 GMT Message-ID: <30250441.14601274724989242.JavaMail.jira@thor> Date: Mon, 24 May 2010 14:16:29 -0400 (EDT) From: "Corey Richard (JIRA)" To: dev@directory.apache.org Subject: [jira] Created: (DIR-256) Cosmetic - Grammar on Vision page MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=utf-8 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit X-JIRA-FingerPrint: 30527f35849b9dde25b450d4833f0394 Cosmetic - Grammar on Vision page --------------------------------- Key: DIR-256 URL: https://issues.apache.org/jira/browse/DIR-256 Project: Directory Issue Type: Task Components: sitedocs Environment: n/a -- web page issue Reporter: Corey Richard Assignee: Alex Karasulu Priority: Trivial I realize that this will come off as picky, but if it was my page I would want to know. In hopes of helping the web pages to appear a bit more polished: On: http://directory.apache.org/api/vision.html 1) "An clear example is the underlying network layer : " The colon should not have a space before it, and the sentence should start as "A clear example". 2) "OpenDS will use Grizzly, when we will use MINA." The second part of the sentence is too clse to "when will we", and it makes the sentence awkward. It would probably work out better as: "OpenDS will use Grizzly, while we will use MINA." (Though, on this point I'm not entirely sure, because the first part of the sentence is in third person and the second part is in first. This makes it look like two different groups are being talked about. It's confusing because earlier on the page the term "OpenDS" is talked about as "we". Just trying to explain it is confusing.) Again, I don't mean to be picky simply in order to tear anything or anyone down; I just don't want the project to be slighted because of confusion on the web page. -- This message is automatically generated by JIRA. - You can reply to this email to add a comment to the issue online.