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From "Kim Haase (JIRA)" <j...@apache.org>
Subject [jira] Commented: (DERBY-2520) Document new restrictions of database shutdown, encryption and hard upgrade powers
Date Fri, 01 Jun 2007 17:31:16 GMT

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Kim Haase commented on DERBY-2520:
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Thanks, Dag! Everything looks great here. I think your change to devguide/cdevcsecure36127.dita
is fine.

I have only one additional correction.

devguide/rdevcsecure13713.html -- the use of italics is not quite right.

In the two examples, "enduser" is meant to be a literal (that is, not in italics) -- the actual
argument to the procedure. But in the sentence describing the argument, I put "username" in
italics. That's a documentation convention to indicate that it is a replaceable value. So
it would be helpful if you could remove the italics from the two occurrences of "enduser"
and then replace "enduser" with "username" (still in italics) in the phrase "the value specified
by the derby.user.enduser property". You might also replace "enduser" in the two examples
with something more obviously fictitious, like "redbaron" to go with the password of "red29PlaNe",
so people know it's just an example.


The Reference Manual changes are fine, though I have one suggestion for the future: as a general
rule in technical writing, we don't say "please". We try to be polite and businesslike, and
we also try to avoid excess verbiage. Much of our writing consists of instructions, and we'd
have to say "please" very often, which might be annoying. No need to remove the word in these
files, but you might keep this in mind for the future. If you end up having to edit them again
to reflect the new behavior from DERBY-2264, you could fix it then.


> Document new restrictions of database shutdown, encryption and hard upgrade powers
> ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------
>
>                 Key: DERBY-2520
>                 URL: https://issues.apache.org/jira/browse/DERBY-2520
>             Project: Derby
>          Issue Type: Improvement
>          Components: Documentation
>            Reporter: Dag H. Wanvik
>            Assignee: Dag H. Wanvik
>             Fix For: 10.3.0.0
>
>         Attachments: DERBY-2520-2.diff, DERBY-2520-2.stat, DERBY-2520-2.tar.gz, DERBY-2520-2.zip,
DERBY-2520.diff, DERBY-2520.stat, DERBY-2520.tar.gz, DERBY-2520.zip
>
>
> Add documentation for the new functionality introduced with DERBY-2264.

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