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From shan...@apache.org
Subject cvs commit: xml-cocoon2/src/documentation/xdocs index.xml
Date Thu, 06 Jun 2002 17:35:45 GMT
shannon     2002/06/06 10:35:45

  Modified:    src/documentation/xdocs index.xml
  Log:
  Minor edits. Could someone
  please consider the fixme comment
  I added which proposes revised language for
  the last sentence of the second paragraph?
  
  Revision  Changes    Path
  1.10      +17 -11    xml-cocoon2/src/documentation/xdocs/index.xml
  
  Index: index.xml
  ===================================================================
  RCS file: /home/cvs/xml-cocoon2/src/documentation/xdocs/index.xml,v
  retrieving revision 1.9
  retrieving revision 1.10
  diff -u -r1.9 -r1.10
  --- index.xml	24 May 2002 13:06:18 -0000	1.9
  +++ index.xml	6 Jun 2002 17:35:45 -0000	1.10
  @@ -11,33 +11,39 @@
   	</header>
   	<body>
   		<figure src="images/cocoon.gif" alt="Cocoon"/>
  -		<s1 title="What is this?">
  +		<s1 title="What is Cocoon?">
   			<p>
      Apache Cocoon is an XML publishing framework that raises the usage of
      XML and XSLT technologies for server applications to a new
      level. Designed for performance and scalability around pipelined SAX
  -   processing, Cocoon offers a flexible environment based on the separation
  -   of concerns between content, logic and style. A centralized
  -   configuration system and sophisticated caching top this all off and help
  -   you to create, deploy and maintain rock-solid XML server applications.
  +   processing, Cocoon offers a flexible environment based on a separation
  +   of concerns between content, logic, and style. To top this all off, 
  +   Cocoon's centralized configuration system and sophisticated caching help
  +   you to create, deploy, and maintain rock-solid XML server applications.
    </p>
   			<p>
  -   Cocoon interacts with most data sources, including: filesystems, RDBMS,
  +   Cocoon interacts with most data sources, including filesystems, RDBMS,
      LDAP, native XML databases, and network-based data sources. It adapts
      content delivery to the capabilities of different devices like HTML, WML,
  -   PDF, SVG, RTF just to name a few. Cocoon currently runs as a Servlet or
  -   from a powerful commandline interface. The chosen design of an abstracted
  +   PDF, SVG, and RTF, to name just a few. You can run Cocoon as a Servlet as well as
  +   through a powerful, commandline interface. The chosen design of an abstracted
      environment gives you the freedom to implement your own concrete
      environment to suit your required functionality.
    </p>
  + <fixme author="DS">
  + The last sentence remains awkward. Is it correct to write as follows:
  + The deliberate design of its abstract environment gives you the freedom to
  + implement the functionality you need within your own custom, concrete environment.
  + </fixme>
  + 
   		</s1>
  -		<s1 title="Where is it?">
  +		<s1 title="Where can I find it?">
   			<p>
  -   If you want to download the latest release @released.version@ of Apache Cocoon just
go to the 
  +   To download the latest release @released.version@ of Apache Cocoon, go to the 
      <link href="http://xml.apache.org/cocoon/dist/">download area.</link>
   			</p>
   			<p>
  -   If you are looking for the past generation of Cocoon (not supported anymore but still
available) 
  +   If you are looking for a past generation of Cocoon (no longer supported but still available),

      go to the <link href="http://xml.apache.org/cocoon1/">Cocoon 1.x area</link>.

      			 </p>
   		</s1>
  
  
  

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