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From Noah Slater <nsla...@apache.org>
Subject Re: press release draft
Date Tue, 19 Mar 2013 16:27:06 GMT
> "community and products have been well-governed under the ASF's
meritocratic process and principles"

This strikes me as an awkward phrasing.

> "member of the projects’ Management Committee"

Chip will be the Chair, and this should be capitalised as Project
Management Committee.

> "its being governed the ‘Apache way’"

Missing word.

> "which is well understood and open, delivering so many great pieces of
software over the years"

This seems poorly worded.



On 19 March 2013 16:17, Chip Childers <chip.childers@sungard.com> wrote:

> On Tue, Mar 19, 2013 at 10:15:49AM -0500, Joe Brockmeier wrote:
> > Thanks for running with this! Comments in-line.
> >
> > On Tue, Mar 19, 2013 at 01:10:30PM +0000, Giles Sirett wrote:
> > >    The Apache Software Foundation announces that CloudStack has become
> a
> > >    top-tier project
> >
> > The Apache Software Foundation Announces Apache CloudStack as a
> > Top-Level Project
> >
> > (let's stick with prior heds and use "Apache CloudStack" rather than
> > just CloudStack. And I suspect we'll have a TM following Apache
> > CloudStack?)
> >
> > >    CloudStack, the well-established, production ready,  Cloud
> Management
> > >    Platform today became an Apache Foundation (ASF)  Top-Level project,
> > >    signifying the projects ability to self-govern and become part of
> the
> > >    wider ASF community.
> >
> > This graf is mixing the dek and the lede - we should just have a dek
> > here that follows the hed and gives some basic info about the project.
> >
> > Dek:
> >
> > Mature, open source turn-key platform for delivering scalable,
> > full-featured Infrastructure-as-a-Service (IaaS) clouds.
> >
> > >
> > >    [release location/date]
>
> Location is:
> Forest Hill, MD
>
> >
> > >    The Apache Software Foundation, the organisation  that governs
> Tomcat,
> > >    Hadoop, and nealy 150 other open-source projects, today announced
> that
> > >    Apache CloudStack  has graduated from the Apache Incubator to
> become a
> > >    Top-Level Project (TLP), signifying that the Project's community and
> > >    products have been well-governed under the ASF's meritocratic
> process and
> > >    principles.
> >
> > The ledes are fairly standardized, so I'm going to assume we'll want to
> > stick with the existing formula. I have changed "today announced" to
> > "announced today," because I've never understood why press releases use
> > that odd phrasing.
> >
> > Lede:
> >
> > The Apache Software Foundation (ASF), the all-volunteer developers,
> > stewards, and incubators of nearly 150 open source projects and
> > initiatives, announced today that Apache CloudStack has graduated from
> > the Apache Incubator to become a Top-Level Project (TLP), signifying
> > that the project's community and products have been well-governed under
> > the ASF's meritocratic process and principles.
> >
>
> +1 to the above
>
> > Typically the quote from the VP comes next, so lets move up Chip's quote
> > and follow the format:
> >
> > "When CloudStack first became an Apache Incubator project, it was  a
> > well-established cloud management platform, so its codebase was already
> > mature," said Chip Childers, Vice President of Apache CloudStack. "Our
> work
> > in the Incubator has focused on the governance of the project and
> > building a really strong community around Apache CloudStack."
> >
>
> Rewording the quote to reorder building a community and governance:
>
> "When CloudStack first became an Apache Incubator project, it was a
> well-established cloud management platform, so its codebase was already
> mature," said Chip Childers, Vice President of Apache CloudStack. "Our work
> in the Incubator has focused on growing a really strong community around
> the
> code and establishing the governance practices expected of a top level
> project
> within the Apache Software Foundation."
>
> > Formerly the product of Cloud.com, which was acquired by Citrix in 2011,
> > CloudStack was submitted to the Apache Incubator in April 2012.
> >
> > >    CloudStack is a well established cloud management platform, already
> widely
> > >    in production use by many organisations. It is used to deliver
> > >    Infrastructure-as-a-Service (IaaS) cloud computing in both private,
> public,
> > >    and hybrid-cloud environments. It has been proven to be both stable
> and
> > >    highly scalable, underpinning production clouds with more than
> 30,000 physical
> > >    nodes, in geo-distributed environments.
> >
> > Minor changes in above graf. (Oxford comma, replaced "over" with "more
> > than".)
> >
> > >    Apache CloudStack allows service providers to set up an on-demand,
> elastic
> > >    cloud computing service and enterprises to set-up a private cloud
> for use
> > >    by their own employees. Chip continued "We know that Infrastructure
> > >    -as-a-Service is the next generation of IT infrastructure and that
> people
> > >    will demand open standards and open governance for such an
> important layer
> > >    in their IT stack. That is why the CloudStack project meeting the
> rigorous
> > >    standards of ASF governance is so significant. "
> >
> > Replaced "feel" with "know" - IMHO we should be confident that people
> > will be moving to IaaS.
>
> I'd like to add something like:
>
> "The Apache CloudStack community looks forward to welcoming new
> collaborators into the project."
>
> It doesn't have to be a quote, or could be.  The point is that I'd like to
> mention
> that we *do* welcome new folks!
>
> >
> > We need to condense the "About" section - typically these are one or two
> > grafs. Can we shorten this to the bare essentials and direct people to
> > the Website for more? Something of similar length to the Apache "About"
> > section would be ideal.
> >
> > >    About Apache CloudStack
> > >
> > >    Apache CloudStack is a complete software suite for creating
> Infrastructure
> > >    as a Service (IaaS) clouds. Target environments include service
> providers
> > >    and enterprises.
> > >
> > >    o The Apache CloudStack platform enables service providers to set
> up an
> > >    on-demand, elastic cloud computing service. It enables a utility
> computing
> > >    service by allowing service providers to offer self-service virtual
> > >    machine instances, storage volumes, and networking configurations
> over the
> > >    Internet.
> > >
> > >    o The Apache CloudStack platform enables enterprises to set up a
> private
> > >    cloud for use by their own employees. The current generation of
> > >    virtualization infrastructure targets enterprise IT departments who
> manage
> > >    virtual machines the same way they would manage physical machines.
> The
> > >    Apache CloudStack platform, on the other hand, enables self-service
> of
> > >    virtual machines by users outside of the IT department.
> > >
> > >    o As an open source IaaS, Apache CloudStack is available to
> individuals
> > >    and organizations that wish to study and implement an IaaS for
> personal,
> > >    educational, and/or production use.
> > >
> > >    The CloudStack platform includes the Management Server and
> extensions to
> > >    industry-standard hypervisor software (e.g. XenServer, vSphere, KVM)
> > >    installed on Hosts running in the cloud. The Management Server is
> deployed
> > >    on a farm of management servers. The administrator provisions
> resources
> > >    (Hosts, storage devices, IP addresses, etc.) into the Management
> Server
> > >    and the Management Server manages those resources. The Management
> server
> > >    presents web interfaces to end users and administrators that enable
> them
> > >    to take actions on some or all of their instances in the IaaS cloud.
> >
> > Best,
> >
> > jzb
> > --
> > Joe Brockmeier
> > http://dissociatedpress.net/
> > Twitter: @jzb
> >
>



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